Nov 3, 2010

Full Circle QuickWrite

Original:
The Good Thief
An orphan with only one hand was adopted by a grave robber. The thief claimed to be the orphan's older brother and brought him to meet his comrades. They met a lot of people and have new comrades. The orphan then find out who his uncle is, then his mom and last, his father.

The orphan find out what is the job of his adopter, who his family is and how he lost his other hand.
The orphan was adopted, so he can find out the things about his past.
It is a good story, so, I will recommend it to a friend. I think that the story has to make the reader wanting to know more and more about what what is going to happen later on in the story. But they have to give hints all the way though and not just pop up.

Corrected:

An orphan with only one hand was adopted by a grave robber. The thief claimed to be the orphan's older brother and brought him to meet his comrades. They met a lot of people and made friends. The orphan then find out who his uncle was, then his mom and last, his father.

The orphan find out what his adopted father did for a living, who his family was and how he lost his other hand.
The orphan was adopted, so he could find out the things about his past.
It is a good story, so, I will recommend it to a friend. 
I think that a story has to make the reader want to know more and more about what what is going to happen later on in the story. But they have to give hints all the way though and not just pop up.

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