Dog Star's Way of Writing

Original: 

The author starts with a dream then a flashback of the main character's life with he dog Laika, how they met and gets separated.

Laika was abandoned, and the main character give Laika love; Laika obeys the main character and not any other people. Once, for work, he took Laika with her, and at night something awful happen. Laika saved the main character, Laika .......

Corrected: 

The author starts with a dream then a flashback of the main character's life with his dog Laika, how they met and got separated.

Laika was abandoned, and the main character gave Laika love; Laika obeys the main character and not any other people. Once, for work, he took Laika with him, and at night something awful happened. Laika saved the main character when the earthquake happens. He loves Laika more and more, but because of his work, he need to choose between Laika and his job. He chose his job and gave Laika to his friend, but Laika, not able to stay with him, loses his will to live. 

The Most Dangerous Game Quick Write - A villain

From: A Series of Unfortunate Events
Villain: Count OLaf
Original:
He claimed to be the uncle of 3 kids, whose parents passed away and left a large amount of fortunes behind. He wanted the money so he adopted the kids, but he treated them badly. He even killed the people who adopted the kids later on in the story, and tries to marry the oldest daughter. He died in the end of the story without any of the fortunes.

Corrected:
He claimed to be the uncle of 3 kids, whose parents passed away and left a large fortune behind. He wanted the money so he adopted the kids, but he treated them badly. He even killed the people who adopted the kids later on in the story, and tries to marry the oldest daughter. He died in the end of the story without any of the fortunes.
This character interest me because he have many interesting ways that he intend to steal the fortunes. And you will want to keep on reading about what Count OLaf is going to do next and how are the children going to escape.

Dog Star Quick Write

Original:

I don't really have had a special relationship with an animal, but I have quite a lot of pets before. When you are alone at home, you can talk to you pet, sometimes, they can seem to be understanding what you say to them. 

You can always just having some animals to talk to and they are always a good listener, they won't talk back to you, even though they also can't make suggestions to you, just having it to listen to you heart may be better if you want to solve your problem yourself.

For a pet, you can take it wherever you want it, as long as it is allowed, but you can't just take one of your friends with you.

Corrected:

I haven't really had a special relationship with an animal, but I have had quite a lot of pets before. When you are alone at home, you can talk to your pet sometimes they seem to understand what you say to them. 

When you are feeling sad, you can talk to the pets and they are always a good listener. They won't talk back to you, even though they can't make suggestions to you. But just having it to listen to your heart may be better if you want to solve your problem yourself.

For a pet, you can take it wherever you want it, as long as it is allowed, but you can't just take one of your friends with you. For example, you want to go for a walk at the park at 11 o'clock at night. Not a lot of people is able to go with you or they don't even want to go, but a pet can.

Dog Star Vocabulary Test

Original:
1. She has an aura of desolation loss, should we go and comfort her?
2. He have a lot of friends that are astronomer, so he can ask them to help him with this project.
3. That light was stellar in the dark when we got lost bak there.
4. She is luminous even before she became a famous singer.
5. Even through he is a human himself, he is misanthropic.
6. That object we found on the moon is an terrestrial object, I wonder what it is.
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8. She is planning a labyrinthine experiment at the lab, we shouldn't go and distract her.

Corrected:

1. The aura of her desolation loss is quite distracting. Should we go and comfort her?

2. He have a lot of friends that are astronomer, so he can ask them to help him with this project.

3. That light from the light house was stellar when we got lost in the sea.

4. She is luminous with her friends even before she became a famous singer.

5. Even through he is a human himself, he is misanthropic.

6. That object we found on the moon is a terrestrial object, I wonder what it is.

7. She won by default, because there isn't anyone that can compete with her in her age group. 

8. She is planning a labyrinthine experiment at the lab. We shouldn't go and distract her.

The Initiation Summary

Original:
The main character got into the initiation, and she picked Bev to be her "Big Sister". She has to do everything Bev told her to do. At first, she thinks that it is kind of embarrassed to ask people questions Bev ask her to do, but sometimes she meet interesting people. So she know that if she can put her mind to it, she find it fun. Then she thinks that being initiated is not that bad.

Corrected:
The main character got into the initiation for joining the sororities, and she picked Bev to be her "Big Sister". She has to do everything Bev told her to do. At first, she thinks that it is kind of embarrassing to ask people questions Bev ask her to do, but sometimes she meet interesting people. So she know that if she can put her mind to it, she can find it quite fun. Then she thinks that being initiated is not that bad. So she will tried and enjoy the rest of her time of being initiate, and not feel bad about it.