Original:
The main character got into the initiation, and she picked Bev to be her "Big Sister". She has to do everything Bev told her to do. At first, she thinks that it is kind of embarrassed to ask people questions Bev ask her to do, but sometimes she meet interesting people. So she know that if she can put her mind to it, she find it fun. Then she thinks that being initiated is not that bad.
Corrected:
The main character got into the initiation for joining the sororities, and she picked Bev to be her "Big Sister". She has to do everything Bev told her to do. At first, she thinks that it is kind of embarrassing to ask people questions Bev ask her to do, but sometimes she meet interesting people. So she know that if she can put her mind to it, she can find it quite fun. Then she thinks that being initiated is not that bad. So she will tried and enjoy the rest of her time of being initiate, and not feel bad about it.
This is not really a good summary Misty, since you don't tell me what happens in the story. Focus on the key events that move the story forward. The action is important in a summary, not the characters thoughts and feelings. I'll pass it for now but you need to improve on this.
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